Article Review Literature & Language Article Essay (Article Sample)
2 pages / 550 words
Nov 1, 4;00 am
Provide comprehensive, constructive feedback for each attached essay
(no more than 1 page for each essay). The feedback must address the
degree to which writing successfully meets the essay requirements
(below), with particular consideration for the following questions:
• How well does the thesis statement define the topic of the paper?
How can the statement be better focused?
• Is the angle or perspective on the topic of the paper clearly
expressed? How can this be improved?
• Is the writer making effective use of primary and secondary sources?
• Is the writer responsibly citing sources? Are all ideas from outside
sources accurately referenced and documented?
• Is the writer effectively integrating appropriate visual support?
Does the writer choose qualitative images and details that best define
the art history?
• Are there additional questions that you think might be useful for
developing the paper?
13 hours ago
I have attached the article the two essay reviews are based on for
Feedback on Essay Review
Feedback on OC essay
The thesis statement for the above essay defines the topic of the paper well without leaving the reader with an unclear idea. The piece begins by pointing out that two scholars have highlighted the challenge of viewing and obscuring the Parthenon Frieze namely A.W. Lawrence and Bernard Ashmole. These scholars argue that the frieze is “nearly forty feet from the floor and at an angle of vision so sharp it was difficult to distinguish the main actions,” and can only be seen in “glimpses between columns.”The statement points out to the reader what the topic is about.[B. Ashmole, Architect, and sculptor in classical Greece(London, 1972) I18]
The statement has focus because the writer takes a stand on the argument of the presence of the challenge of viewing and obscuring the frieze. He says consideration of the relation of position, subject, and style in art justify how the frieze appears. The perspective of the topic is well brought out by the writer stating how Osborne, in his article, explains that lack of comprehension of the correlation that exists in position, subject, and style in art causes a lack of understanding of the piece of art of the frieze by viewers.